Two loose yellow tongues flap me back
to that cul-de-sac of leather
balls bounced on a tarry hot blacktop.
The sweat came fast, our slapping palms
got slippery. We couldn't waste time
on excuses or fouls, just elbows
strategically placed, saggy smiles
and my canvas Chuck T's tearing
away from worn-down rubber soles.
The Day 16 NaPoWriMo prompt from ReadWritePoem is called What's that smell? Through it we'll take an olfactory-based stroll down memory lane.
9 comments:
This is brilliant, Francis. The blows and knocks and smells are very vibrant here. There is a bouncing reverberation here. And of course I am a big fan of smells in poetry. Any kinds of smells. :)
Hi Francis,
See, I never had this type of olfactory experience; sweat, leather, tarmac, tired pumps/sneakers(?!). A nice comfy armchair always beat physical exertion!
Brilliantly crafted. The sound of the language, the assonance, it all works great!
Francis,
Outstanding piece!
Pamela
Man this is good! It's similar to a poem I found at http://thehatlist.wordpress.com/ the other day, and that guy is good.
neat and tight experience...as if just yesterday... tabac infusion
never have come across such brilliant, esoteric poetry in all my years of teaching/ writing poetry!
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@Jenny I haven't done much with smells, so this was a good first work-out :).
@Derrick I was always a wannabe jock, so I fed my athletic fantasies as often as I could.
@PoemBlaze Thanks, these quick turnarounds always have me worried I'm rushing through the pieces.
@Pamela Thanks, as always.
@Levi I'll have to check out that hat list.
@OneMore It seems like yesterday, bit it's now many ago.
@Smita Thanks... I think I have esoteric down pretty well, I'm not always up to the brilliant ;).
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