a white hush
fell on me,
as you hushed me,
"Quiet... ." Still,
in your white,
you wait for this
weighty thought
to break through
the storm's cushion:
"Stillness, I know
may not stay
in your life,
but it will in-
still silence
to linger
in your life, and
remind you
there can be
more, much more still."
— Francis Scudellari
This poem is written in response to Read Write Prompt #106: Repeat after me at Read Write Poem. The prompt was to practice repetition.
20 comments:
to hold each thought in silent stillness...
lovely poem... has quite a cooling feel in a way...
hope you're well
jp
(word verification asks for 'talialit')
'Stillness' is itself so rare! Beautiful words, a more lovely poem!
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Thanks.
This is a lovely poem,Francis...I'm not used to your writing more than haiku!
I thought I left a comment...but I don't see it...anyway, this is such a lovely poem.
Beautifully done - as always.
I love what you do with still/stillness here. Lovely.
I love this. It sings to the heart.
I like this kind of silent night, reminding one that "there can be more, much more still."
watching the birds in the feeder as the snow falls in the mountains....stillness....its wonderful and thanks for sharing this
Movement within stillness! Very nicely done with these simple bones! Good response to the prompt. Nice poem, yes.
@Jon Thanks. It was inspired by a friend's description of the stillness she loved during a winter's storm, so the coolness may come from that. I'm well, or as well as I can tell :). "Talia Lit" may just be the title to a future poem... it has a nice ring to it.
@Smita Stillness is something I need to seek out more often. Thank you. I just visited and read that lovely post.
@RN I sometimes venture into longer pieces :).
@Anthony Thanks so much.
@Erin It went through a number of incarnations, so I hope I got it right :).
@makeda42 I'm glad to hear that. It was heartfelt.
@Paul As much as I claim to dislike winter, it does have some lessons to teach me.
@Wayne I think if I could get closer to nature during the snowfalls I'd have a much greater appreciation of the season. It sounds lovely.
@Bearly Thanks. The winter seems to inspire me to simplify my lines a lot more.
Nice.
Still, stillness. Many fine lines and images flow with thoughtfulness.
I like the patient, buoyant way this floats down to its more substantial destination, and how the shape of it on the page and its economy of words captures the image and meaning as well.
Very much enjoyed this post on the quiet hush of snow. Reminds me of an old "Night Gallery" episode!
Actually, quite lovely..
Evelyn, Tumblewords, David and Cynthia: Thanks so much. It's really nice to know the poem had the effect I intended.
Wonderfully crafted and beautiful. Your repetition of words worked well here. Good job.
-Nicole
I love the calm this induces. Beautiful!
I had a really hard time with this prompt, I could not figure out how to repeat and sound good. You on the other hand really did an impressive job. I liked the repetition of not only the words, but in what you invoked as well.
Nicole, Karen and Roberta ... Thanks!
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