Bauble brothers hang red,one rotund, one spouted,
both made a magenta
melancholy by fog.
Its white whispers nightly,
slipping their bloody seeds
down paper-funnel tales
of supple branches stripped,
and the skin-cracking eyes
coming too soon to cull.
— Francis Scudellari
This poem is written in response to Read Write Prompt #103: pomegranate at Read Write Poem. This week's prompt was the photo above right (Pomegranate by Nasos3), which has a spooky air about it that I tried to capture in the verse.
14 comments:
cool site for prompts... I'll have to give one of these a try.
and I like what you've done with the pomegranate... especially the line about the blood seeds... how can something so tasty look so much like a murder scene?
I like the way you work from expected natural color back to the color altered by the whispering fog.
You've painted a vivid picture here with your words. Excellently done.
Hi Francis,
Your words fit the image well and create a slightly sinister world!
Very perceptive of you Francis! What an interesting way to view the picture and poetry of its content. I enjoyed these lines.
Regards,
DH
Yes, very good idea to actually use the painting as the topic! Enjoyable!
I loved the "skin cracking-eyes" image you created and how you managed to blend the real pomegranate with the one painted beside the poem. Beautiful work, Francis. Thanks for sharing.
This is a nice rendition of the photograph in words. I like the sounds, the way rotund plays against spouted, and "magenta melancholy", and the skin-cracking eyes, which goes along with the "bloody" earlier.
I agree with David - lovely sounds in this piece -I read it aloud more than once.
Sometimes a description can enhance a visual image - this is such a case.
nice bauble bro...nicely done and again thanks for sharing this bro
francis you beautifully managed to make a sparse, desolate scene colorful and dynamic with intense language (bloody, magenta, fog). a fine poem, especially enjoy "skin-cracking eyes". -lawrence
a great visual poem : it matches perfectly the visual prompt. I love"magenta melancholy"...
Bravo! Particularly fond of 'slipping their bloody seeds/down paper-funnel tales/of.. A delightful read.
Short but intense. You've certainly done justice to the image!
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