Her sigh rends his why
opens dark torrents, she nips
with a crackling glare
(for the Haiku Bones prompt: Electrifying)
And here's an alternate version, which I tweeted and got positive feedback on:
Her sigh rends the sky
followed by wordy torrents
then a crackling glare
Feel free to cast your vote in the comments...
6 comments:
Wow! In your 3 lines, you've said it all!
I really like them both! Thank you for sharing them.
These are great! Crackling with electricity!
@Smita Not quite all, but thanks :).
@YouSei Thanks for the visit!
@Nancy Thanks, I'll be back for next weeks prompt.
enjoyed both haikus......great job!
Nice work on both of them.
Melanie
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