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Tuesday, January 05, 2010

Crackling

Her sigh rends his why
opens dark torrents, she nips
with a crackling glare

(for the Haiku Bones prompt: Electrifying)

And here's an alternate version, which I tweeted and got positive feedback on:

Her sigh rends the sky
followed by wordy torrents
then a crackling glare

Feel free to cast your vote in the comments...
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