let us join hands
you and i
and tramp down this falling away
road new paved with over-baked schemes
and the shattered
windshield glass from a dream car
we left for dead many miles back
every tire including the spare had blown
and they still hiss their casual tunes
while popped-out
flesh-tone hoses
dangle and sprinkle
a rainbow gloss on black-rimmed puddles
it’s a cause for deepening joy
these shallows won’t
dry up in either of our weened lifetimes
moisten your lips dear
and make that pineapple-sweet whistle
i love to taste
when i dare to plant my tongue there
the food’s long gone
and pots are now for banging
we’ve lost our way
and maps are made for shredding
into playfully themed streamers
we’ll tie in our hair
as we dance off the waning
silky heat of a too-late summer
the sun’s dial is flipping
and bound by those zeros
we’ve gotta go but it’s best
we’re brought low together
This week's Big Tent Poetry prompt is a wordle, that jumbled confection of vocabulary you can see pictured at right. It's a bit of a secret mash-up; the words were taken from an unrevealed but "well-regarded" poet's published poems, so check back in to the BTP site to find out who that was. I'm sure they'd be surprised to see their words put to this particular use :^).
17 comments:
wow!
the rhythm and the images join hands to create a beautiful sense of freedom here... when you feel you are walking on a new path... no! it can be the same path... but suddenly you are looking at it with 'new' eyes...
really liked it!
(the way you have worked your way through those words in the prompt is... more than creative!)
:)
Wow! I love this, Francis. Strong cadence pulled me through it. The title grabbed me right away, and what a satisfying read.
~Brenda
Wonderful word art, Francis. You have created a delightful masterpiece from the word prompts provided. I second that "Wow" from human being.
It's as if TS Eliot and BH Fairchild had a lovechild! Incredible!
...over-baked schemes
and the shattered
windshield glass from a dream car
we left for dead many miles back
You've outdone yourself, Francis.
The pace of the poem caught me up and swirled me through to the end. A satisfying read.
This poem captured me at the beginning and took me along in its flow to the end. So many vivid images. I enjoyed these lines particularly:
we’ll tie in our hair
as we dance off the waning
silky heat of a too-late summer
It sounds a fun journey, Francis! I like those 'casual tunes' that the tyres still hiss, the sweet pineapple whistle and the poignancy of the last two lines.
Started laughing when I saw the title and thoroughly enjoyed the romp through your field of words. Especially liked the pineapple whistle and the final lines. But that's not fair, I really liked the entire piece from beginning to end.
Elizabeth
It's amazing the stories we come up with. Love particuarly the pineapple sweet whistle! Excellent!
Francis I love the flow of this piece. The images are engaging!
Pamela
Packed with great images and reads fluently.
Great dance!
Poor car. wonder what made it fall to pieces like that.
I buried a TBird for the wordle.
nicely sdone francis....flowed really well
Fabulous sentiment in all the decay -- I mean it's downright "cheery" and yet there is clearly impending death & doom.
Love that!
(And yes, I wonder what the featured poet might think of our exercise!)
Love that title.
It was a pleasure reading it.
dances of the zeroes
A powerful piece. It's a delightful read and then the reality sneaks in and...then... This makes me smile before becoming teary-eyed.
The cadence of this piece draws the reader in, and then the story within holds you tightly throughout. Very nice!
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