Ibkek sits idly by
the meadow's green and varied blooms,
paid only inattention.
He, not minutes passing nigh,
envies but this bumble
who black-and-gold buzzes onward
with purposeful zags. "She fits
so nicely here," he mumbles.
"Why, even duller drones,
though weak and puny, have a place."
The worker, she might envy
Ibkek this, his freedom's moan
to fritter life drinking,
but busy harvests push instead
her bee-bound thoughts, set upon
a queen's idyllic kinking.
7 comments:
It seems Ibkek and I share a fate. Also the bumbles remind me of a poem I wrote a while back, The Snail and the Bumblebee.
Looking back at an old self is strange, trying to rediscover what I felt when I wrote it. I wonder, do you feel the same when you read back your old work? Do you ever look back?
Sometimes it can feel like exposure, especially when the words written seem juvenile on reflection.
Of course I'm prattling again, a bad habit of mine...
I loved reading this poem, longer than your recent posts, but it still maintains the intricacy and obvious attention to detail. The first two lines set the scene wonderfully well, and then... perfectly expressed. Thank you
Yes, I feel very much the same. I don't look back very much because in some sense I do feel like those pieces were written by someone else, and the me I am now might try to rewrite them with a different perspective. I'm glad you liked the poem... I'm off to check out yours now.
the images here are so well conveyed; I liked the use of all the " mble" words and really liked " the bee bound thinking" .... bee bound... what an interesting notion.
Constant regeneration/evolution. I guess it is a good thing, to always strive to be something more. It keeps things fresh.
It will be a pleasure to have you by...
@Harlequin Thank you. My human-bound thinking sometimes suggests some interesting ideas :). I liked how bee-bound created a kind of stutter effect.
@Scrybe I have quite a blindspot when it comes to the past. Sometimes that's a liability, but I prefer it to the opposite situation. It's always a pleasure to stop by.
I like the way that the lines of this one embody the bumbling of the content... so well done!
hope you're good and that inspiration is never far away...
jp
Thanks Jon. I am well, and always trying to coax the inspiration to stick around a little longer. I hope you're doing well also.
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