I'm- material as a ghost who passes over, through barren and busy worlds, each footprint too slight, my outlined frame too misshapen, for the tended masses to not- ice
@Jena Thanks, but it was just a cast off fragment that I was playing around with.
@Confused Yeah, I tend to wallow in that feeling a lot :).
@Susan Breaking it as "no-tice" didn't work as well, so I decided to go the unconventional route.
@Bobby The notice of the tended masses definitely doesn't matter. The verse grew out of a tension I'm always caught between ... the sense of insignificance within the universe (and I generally accept that) vs. the desire to matter on a very micro scale ... with certain individuals I care about. It's an inevitable but frustrating byproduct of my current personal situation.
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I like it, brilliant, a real poet! Bravo!
a feeling I have had through out my years..well done Francis
Notice/not-ice. Interesting; I'd never thought of it in those terms.
I am reminded of my lines:
I walk by unnoticed
an odorless fume thickly moistened
swept by crisp breeze
into endless horizons
And so, is your desire to be noticed? To be devoured by the tended masses? Or does it not matter?
@Jena Thanks, but it was just a cast off fragment that I was playing around with.
@Confused Yeah, I tend to wallow in that feeling a lot :).
@Susan Breaking it as "no-tice" didn't work as well, so I decided to go the unconventional route.
@Bobby The notice of the tended masses definitely doesn't matter. The verse grew out of a tension I'm always caught between ... the sense of insignificance within the universe (and I generally accept that) vs. the desire to matter on a very micro scale ... with certain individuals I care about. It's an inevitable but frustrating byproduct of my current personal situation.
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