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Thursday, July 09, 2009

Swarms

By Francis Scudellari

Swarms, swarms
everywhere
birds, toads
the swarms
of bees
of ants
of thoughts
that something is
not right

8 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

I think you yanked that out of my brain, Francis.

koe said...

This is really an interesting read. It's got a great, fast feel. I like it.

Poem said...

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Jena Isle said...

a poem that arouses the curiosity . Why would there be swarms of these creatures? because??? and these are all in one's thoughts?

What is not right? I guess there would be a next paragraph.

Way to go!

zorlone said...

Very creative... I would have wanted to ask for more, but that is what makes this poem work for me. hehehe..

Z

Francis Scudellari said...

@Susan I may have... I have strange powers :). Actually it was very loosely based on real experiences. Saw ant and bird swarms, and my sister had a bee swarm. I threw in the toads for affect.

@koe Thanks... it was written very quickly, literally in a few minutes so that feel is pretty authentic :).

@Poem I will check out your site.

@Jena I liked leaving the ending open like that. Just a sense that something is going on, but not sure what. Omens or warnings... perhaps

@Zorlone It probably could have used some more development, but I thought the simplicity was a nice change of pace form my usual stuff.

Anonymous said...

This post reminds me of my dad's problem about his honeybees swarming. The other day he found his colony on an out-of-reach tree branch within our neighbor's territory. Anyway, you are very talented and very creative. I enjoyed your blog!

Francis Scudellari said...

@Sashindoubutsu That's exactly what happened to my sister. Some bees had suffered a colony collapse and they swarmed into one of her trees as they looked for a new queen. I'm glad you like the blog. I like yours too, and will add it to my reader.